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The content looks good, Lt - short yet informative. Just fix up those spelling errors (and look over the other changes I made) then feel free spam ... errrr ... post away! ;D

My Edit: I find it rude ... and therefore I don’t like ... to change stuff that others write without mentioning ‘why’. If you have any questions, please ask.

- Capitalized ‘This’ as the first word of a sentence.
- ‘Organization’ was spelled wrong.
- Added a comma ... not sure if it’s supposed to be a comma or a semi-colon, but either way it needed a break.
- Added a period, removed the ‘and’, capitalized ‘We’ ... the way you typed it up is the way we’d probably say it, but in writing I think it needs to have the break. (Sorry, this is my old Public Relations/Speech Writing job coming out of me now. hehe)
- Changed ‘since’ to as ... you had the word since twice in close succession. (Since is one of those funny words that people don't like to hear too often.)
- ‘Known’ was spelled wrong.
- Changed ‘pro’ to lower case to be consistent with the pro previous to it.
- Changed ‘knit’ to lower case.
- 'fine tuning' either has no hyphen or no spaces between the hyphen.
- 'Guild Leader' is not hyphenated.
- Added the apostrophe to ‘don’t’

I'm done messig with the web page now so it should be good to go.

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Greetings Sturmgrenadier,

This is Lt. Kodoss from Legion of Myth.

It is my pleasure to announce that our organization is going to settle on the Starsider Server in Star Wars Galaxies, and hopefully work together with your fine members.

I had the Honor to meet Theremin and a few of your other members in beta. and We are looking forward working together with your PA once again in the future, since as we share the some goals.

Since we are not as well-known as your guild yet let me give you a brief description of our guild Lore:

The Legion of Myth comes from a far off sector of space where we humans, after centuries of alien rule, have finally reclaimed our world. However, what we reclaimed was nothing more than a discarded husk of what our world once was. Now, through the happenstance of fate, we have recently found ourselves embroiled in the politics of the noble Empire and the misguided Rebellion.

Legion of Myth is a pro-Human, pro-Empire guild with a tight-knit group of members who have Experiences in various MMORPGS .
Our Website is currently undergoing some fine tuning by our Guild Leader General Callandryn Humanis.
Please don’t hesitate to drop by our boards and leave us a message under

lomswg.proboards19.com

Long live the Empire ,

Lt. Kodoss
Legion of Myth

Go with Nafzib's version. hehe I tried too hard to not reword what you typed, but Naf did it right.

With you out there making contacts, Kha'max moving forward on recruiting, and me (hopefully) getting into the game soon ... things will be getting fun!

Always here to help. I was wondering why all the nouns were capitalized. I didn't realize you were German until now. It all comes together now.

Bah! You ever have those words tha no matter how many times you do it you never spell them right?

My two are because and forward.

(I spelled because wrong as I wrote it... both times)

/ooc

Yeah, Naf I know exactly what you mean. There are words that I can never spell right like 'amount' and ‘ridiculous’ - you'll note that you'll never see me type them in-game or anywhere I can't spellcheck them.

Also, there are words that I can spell, but I never type right, like 'character' (for some reason my hand does not want to type the last 'c').

So yeah, I have the same problem. That's why I type up most of my posts in Microsoft Word. It checks my spelling for me. The longer the post, the more certain you can be I typed it up in MS Word.

That's a suggestion I make to everone.

Excellent work, Kodoss. I'll check out your handiwork when I get to work. Thank You.